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I remember when I tried to start a DB series about a year ago. Unplanned and stupid. I have however been working on this one for about 6 months now.
Main story is the DBO timeline. Khaio, decendant of Goku, has more or less, anger problems. So, in order to keep himself controlled, he goes to talk to Time Patrol. Trunks, has a chip put into his brain, making him more or less into a cyborg. This chip, helps the young fighter, see more of the good in things, other then the bad, evil in everything, making his attitude more like Gokus. He resembles Goku, but is ****y, and at times, arrogant. If the chip in his brain is ever destroyed, he could lead to destroying the planet. The chip also controls whether or not he can transform, because the sudden change in Ki could disrupt it's function.
I'll post my later thoughts as I write them. I know, he's a saiyan. My original thought was to make him an android. But being since I'm using footage from DBO, doesn't seem like it's going to happen. I also didn't want him to be of Gokus heritage. But, oddly enough, for all of my characters on DragonBall Online, I pick the Goku features for my character. So making him a descendant of Vegeta, wouldn't work right. Tell me what you think of this.
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Always appreciate when someone writes anything. And usually enjoy them.
As I have written a few things myself. I feel as though I should give a critical analysis of this.
Well.... Firstly, you may want to think about you dragon ball story as a non- dragon ball story to be taken seriously. I find that most people who go down the dragon ball fan story root tend to do the same five things. And those are:
1. Using characters of descendants
2. making characters look like original character
3. have saiyan linage
4. forget a lot of dragon ball lore
5/. confuses prior dragon ball timeline.
I think if you uses completely, new character non-realted to the originals, I think it would be more better. I also I think brainstorming idea for a main premiss for there adventure would help. To make a story stretch which also has good continuity, you'll need to strengthen the backstory.
I hope this helps. And wasn't to much. I can be a little to critical sometimes. :p
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